a few “minor” alterations

i meant it as a surprise
i didn’t think you’d hate it
i’ll try and sew the legs back
if you’ll give me half a tick

it’s arms, oh i can fix ’em
if you think i should do
but really it looks better
with the bloody things right off

and what about it’s feet
do they need reversing
here, just let me show you
what do you think of that

i know it would look diff’rent
if i replaced the whole head
but i would say that this has
a certain je ne sais quoi

yes, all in all i think that
it’s a vast improvement
okay, so it’s not working
but where’s the harm in that

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  1. damommza

     /  September 22, 2011

    This SO reminds me of the movie “Boxing Helena” which was a weird love/hate story with a surprise ending. I remember seeing it and thinking “WOW! This is really good!/WOW! This is really weird”

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Boxing_Helena

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    • Never having seen Boxing Helena I’ll have to go on what wikipedia (your link) and IMDb (http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0106471/) have to say about it.
      While the theme of mutilation runs through both my poem and Boxing Helena, the motivating forces appear to be very different. The film appears to be about jealousy and control and, perhaps, weakness. Whereas I had three possible subjects in mind: a small boy who’s destroyed his sister’ favourite doll; the same boy slightly older mutilating a family pet; now grown he’s worked his way up to people. He has no interest in control except for that small amount of time he needs to break it apart and play with the pieces. To him the object has no objective reality which I tried to show by have him say “okay, so it’s not working” rather than “broken” or, in the latter cases, “dead”, followed by the line “but where’s the harm in that”, showing that, as far as he’s concerned, any pain or suffering he has caused is meaningless because it did not happen to him, and that he can’t understand why whoever he’s talking to is upset.

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  2. damommza

     /  September 22, 2011

    OH! I have a better site for you. It’s http://www.themoviespoiler.com/ and it’s every movie you ever wanted to see but didn’t, typed up nealty for you to read! They also have a “quick read” so you don’t have to read the entire movie to see what it was about and how it ended.

    Boxing Helena is a very odd movie because, in the end, you find out that not only did none of this happen, the women is nothing like he thinks of her, in his mind. He wants to control her and he wants to hurt her but the issues are all in his head, not in reality. That’s sort of what it reminded me of in your writings because he cannot see that anything that he does hurts her, he just relates it to how he feels so if she was dead, it would be her fault that she made him do this. He also can’t relate to how having no arms or legs would bother her, only how it relates to him and his “containment” (he keeps her in a box) of her.

    BTW-I’m having a devil of a time getting on to your blog. It won’t link through the e-mail and when I log on directly, half the time it just stalls and won’t connect. I’m hoping it’s WordPress and not my MAC! 😦

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    • I think the difference here is, the protagonist of the film would punish his victim, while blaming her for putting him in that position. But to feel that way he would have to acknowledge his victim’s existence as an autonomous being. It would never enter my protagonist’s head to assume autonomy on the part of any other where it conflicted with his desires. There is only one real person, himself, everybody else are cyphers, subject to his whim. And as such the notions of punishment or fault would not exist for him.

      I,ve been kicked off my own blog a couple of times today. I ended up having to write my response to your comment on “other” three times before I could post it successfully

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  3. damommza

     /  September 22, 2011

    Well, if YOU have been kicked off of your own blog then it’s definitely WordPress!! They should know it’s you! They don’t know what I look like so I could see them denying me entrance! πŸ™‚

    You have a perfect grasp of the behavior of the protagonist in this film. He assumes no responsibility for his behavior other than it is a reaction to HER behavior, therefore, he is the victim, not her and he is to be pitied, not her. He is driven by the need to punish and each time he does, it makes her stronger, and him weaker until finally, he has dismembered her (in his head) and he is then the weakest and she becomes all empowered.

    I think your protagonist is a cad of the most serious sort! πŸ™‚

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    • I think you are being a bit generous to my protagonist, in my view he would probably need a following wind and a full-body makeover just to pass for human. As for the Doctor in BH we’ve all met him, a walking mixture of entitlement and self-proclaimed victimhood (in fact I think he was one of my brothers). πŸ˜€

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  4. damommza

     /  September 22, 2011

    DAMN YOU WORDPRESS!!! *SHAKES FIST*

    Ok, it let me in. It stuck it’s tongue out at me and*snerked* a few times before finally letting me in!

    Your protagonst sounds like Hannibal “The Cannibal” Lechter (Silence of the Lambs, Red Dragon) where as the good Dr. in BH is a whining, sniveling, pompous, self-serving type who, I bet, only reads poetry in a language he doesn’t speak! :-))))

    Now that I have insulted WordPress, I may never be able to get on here again! LOLO

    *knock, knock..please let me in..I have cookies..* πŸ˜›

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