shopping (pleh)

I probably wont make a habit of this (I am at heart a jealous poet) but this is something damommza wrote in a few minutes as a response to a short discussion on grocery shopping on the “Stuff” page. The title is mine, so having said that, this one is:

by damommza

A bit of whimsy for you on this very rainy day across the pond…

my cupboards are empty
my cabinets bare
I’m all out of milk
as hungry as a bear

the shoppes are all crowded
I want to be done
this having to go
is really no fun

I’d like a nice garden
that’d grow in my flat
just spread out some seeds
and be done with that

sliced buns and hot sausage
would grow in a week
buckets of chicken
hot bubble and squeak

I’d even have boxes
of steak and some ale
that would come packaged
and never go stale

small cakes and iced cookies
like flowers would mound
I could just pick them
right off of the ground

with no need to water
don’t even need sun
I’d be so happy
to get this all done

with bushels of apples
and great slabs of cheese
long vines with peppers
as much as I please

hot tea would be steaming
in cups that would grow
right near the windows
with long vines below

then I could write poems
and not waste my time
thinking of writing
while stuck in this line

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15 Comments

  1. damommza

     /  September 30, 2011

    I am truly humbled by your inclusion of one of my poems as a solo on your blog. From the very start, you have been the teacher and I, the eager student. I have studied your structure, your use of form, your clever reversal of thought at the end. I’ve struggled over my syllables, my pronouns, my use of verb AND noun within the same word. I’ve changed my beats, written, re-written, overwritten, thought and over-thought to get poetry that would match up with yours as best as I could. The hallmark of a great teacher is the ability to instill into his student, some of the knowledge that he already has attained and the correct use of it. The hallmark of a good student is to produce, for the teacher, something of his own creation, that is worthwhile of the teacher’s approval. This was my “thank you” to you. A poem that you liked. :-))) ThankYou again.

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    • Learning does NOT require a teacher, just a student. Having said that I would make a lousy teacher as I have no idea what I am doing most of the time, I write almost entirely on instinct and inspiration. However if there is one piece of advice I would give it is: write the poem first, worry about structure, grammer, word games, and whatever else when you get to the editing process. 😀 Oh, one last thing, other people liking your work is a bonus, the important thing is that YOU are writing for an audience of one: yourself.

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      • And perhaps I should have mentioned worrying about spelling at some point, as it’s now 17th Oct and I’ve only just noticed that I spelled “grammar” as “grammer” 😳

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      • damommza

         /  October 17, 2011

        Oh pish-tosh..Try as you might, you will never mispell and typo as often as I do.. 🙂

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  2. damommza

     /  September 30, 2011

    You make a great teacher. I even learned LOLspeak from you! Before i read your LOLpoems, I couldn’t write it! I’d rather a “mentor” if you like that better. I sometimes need someone to tell me that it’s a cello, not a violin, so strop trying to put it under your neck! 🙂

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    • Ohai both uv yu! damommza, I’m no expert but I was reading your first comment to sunovawot and found that it had a certain rythum to it. How much fun would it be to put that comment into a poem in itself? A poem about writing poetry and the struggles and everything that is entailed? What do you think?

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      • damommza

         /  October 17, 2011

        Ohai txgurlgurl!!! What a great idea but sunovawot has to finish it. That’s how we do it! 🙂 I’ll be posting one tomrrow! :-))

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      • damommza

         /  October 18, 2011

        Ohai txgurlgurl! I started a poem in my head last night about writing poetry but it was not really how I do write. This morning I got up and began the real way that I write and sunovawot has safely taken us home. The poem is called ..”on the process” and it is in both our voices. He is the “He” and the “Captain” in the piece. it is up now! 🙂

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    • There you are, damommza, you got a challenge 😆

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      • damommza

         /  October 17, 2011

        I’m takin’ you with me Sir!! Poem to show up tomorrow, with coffee! :-)) I start, you finish..that’s how we roll! 😎

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    • I have now opened a new page called “Other People’s Poetry” where you, or any else, is free to add their solo work. I have started it off with a copy of this poem, (although the original stays here) to “seed” it, the same way I used a verse of yours to seed the “Stuff” page. So as well as having “Stuff” for us to work together, you, and others, have a platform of your own, if any choose to use it.

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  3. damommza

     /  October 17, 2011

    I like that it is a “seed” from which many others will “groe”. That’s the first poem of yours that I read and I was hooked! 🙂

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