what does fire taste like?

by damommza & sunovawot

so what does fire taste like?
I wondered as a I stared
flames licking me with long tongues
it must taste like despair.

I know I’ve kissed the devil
at first it warmed my soul
but then it melted my heart
and left me feeling cold

it dances and it mocks me
bright lights and promises
of pure warmth everlasting
of white hot nights ahead

it’s call to me unbroken
it’s reach beyond my own
and though I dearly want to
I can’t leave it alone

it speaks in every language
with each fiery breath
tales of my damnation
it’s final message, death

so what does fire taste like?
I have no way to tell
but soon I’ll find my answer
in the burning pits of Hell

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17 Comments

  1. damommza

     /  October 26, 2011

    Your first line of the last stanza was my first line of the first stanza, which makes it a perfect ending. This has to be one of my favorites and I really didin’t know where I was going with it but you always get us there safely. I’ve read and re-read this several times. It gets better with each reading. It’s terrific. πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

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    • With a provocative opening line like that, it was obvious before I started writing that that was how I wanted to start the last verse, and also what title I would give it πŸ˜€ But that was the only thing that was obvious πŸ˜†

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  2. romeojosiemom

     /  October 26, 2011

    oooh, very dark but I like it. I really enjoy your works both singly and as a team. They make you think and I can really visualize the picture, scene, etc.

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    • Thank you, right time of year for the dark stuff, but it is a weakness of mine anytime πŸ˜€

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    • damommza

       /  October 26, 2011

      This is fast becoming my favorite poem (and that opinion changes with every poem we write) πŸ™‚
      Thank you so much for coming here and enjoying both sunovawot’s poems as well as our joint efforts! Like sunovawot, the darker the better! πŸ˜€

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  3. Another brilliant team result! πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, damommza keeps settin’ ’em up, and I keep knockin’ ’em down πŸ˜€

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    • damommza

       /  October 26, 2011

      Hi Villow, I hope you are having a wonderful day! We are waiting for snow here! A very unexpected early snow. This has become my favorite poem (unil we write the next one). There’s just something about the whole flow of this poem. I think everyone can relate to something that you know is not good for you but it has a hold on you and you just can’t walk away! πŸ™‚

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  4. I, for one, have no burning desire to find out. Thanks, you two πŸ™‚

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    • Puns are evil, burn the Punster πŸ˜†

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      • damommza

         /  October 26, 2011

        I just can’t hold a candle to your funny retorts!! πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

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    • damommza

       /  October 26, 2011

      No spark of interest? It IS a hot topic, you know! Well, I won’t hold a torch for you on this one…0.o

      Thanks for the giggle PB!

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  5. This is so dark and not a place I would want to go, butt(!) I really like it. You are so talented! It’s not difficult at all to conjur an imaginary short movie to go along with this poem…my imagination is just going wild!!

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    • I can’t say it’s somewhere I’d want to be, but the story I like, thank you πŸ™‚

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    • damommza

       /  October 26, 2011

      OHAI txgurlgurl! I am so glad that this has triggered your imagination. The ability to create images with words is the goal of every writer/poet. I see this poem as being about the “thing” that you can’t let go of, the one that calls you and you go, knowing that no good may come of this. It could be “love”, it could be “chocolate” but whatever your mind conjures up, it leads to your downfall. It DOES sound like a movie! πŸ˜€

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