ending

i am cold and it’s dark
as i walk this lonely way
i can see not a spark
and silently i pray
give me light give me hope
for a future i may see
help me strive help me cope
aid my struggle to be free
and i call in the night
for any who are here
will you show me a light
can you banish my fear
and the silence resounds
’til it fills up my head
and my mind it confounds
like the screams of the dead
and i turn once to gaze
on the ways that i’ve fared
all i see is a maze
and i wonder how i dared
come to this place
this unhallowed ground
and i can feel on my face
the tears pouring down
and off in the gloom
i can hear an eldritch call
a summons to my tomb
and an ending to it all

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  1. so mournful… the use of eldritch is not lost on this gael. 🙂

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    • The ending caught me a bit by surprise, I didn’t know that was how it was going to finish, until it did 😀

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  2. damommza

     /  October 31, 2011

    Ah..HP Lovecraft.”What eldritch dream-world was this into which he had blundered?” :-)))
    I like your longer poems, it’s like you have more running room to complete the entire thought with more detail. Very Sad. Good “mood” piece.. 😀

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    • With this I enjoyed the constraints placed by the rhyme scheme. Interesting that villow called it mournful and you picked up sadness when I see the primary theme as fear 😀

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      • damommza

         /  October 31, 2011

        Hmmm..I think the words that pointed me to sadness were “lonely, pray, hope, struggle, cope and tears streaming down..” so I thought more sad than anything else even though you mention “banishing fear” it seemed more sad to me, than blinding terror/fear. Like the fear that comes with thinking that the sadness will never go away. 😀

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        • And I saw any sadness as a consequence of the fear, not the other way round. Even the tears can be a direct result of fear 😈 😀

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  3. damommza

     /  October 31, 2011

    I guess it also has to do with what the reaction is to both fear and sadness. When I am sad, I am afraid that whatever is making me sad will never go away/get better so that gives me fear but when I am afraid, I get angry and look for a solution. Does that make sense? It’s like two different fears. I guess for me the poem is sad and forelorn, but not the 2nd type of fear. 🙂

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    • I think this is another case where our interpretations differ. 😀 For instance where you read “lonely way” to indicate the protagonist was/is lonely, I read it as the way itself is lonely, meaning there is only one person on it and no reference to how he feels. And as normal with our disagreements, both are perfectly valid ways of interpreting it. 😆

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      • damommza

         /  October 31, 2011

        AH!! I DID interpret it that way! To me the path was an emotional journey and a “lonely way”, not a physical place! I never see these as disagreements, I see them as both of us looking out of the same window yet interpreting he scenery a bit differently! 😀 Unfortunately, one of us has glasses that haven’t come in yet! The storm delayed them! 😀 😎

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