alone

cold, so cold and tired
age overtaken reason
i catch myself in muttering as the world floats by
useless observations
made to amuse nobody
lying in the long grass watching dragons in the sky

once i held forever
as much as any man could
but shallow as a puddle when the sun is running high
then there came the bad days
when all my dreams were broken
and the future i’d been promised turned out to be a lie

now i serve no purpose
in this conflicted orbit
i never saw a prospect but i didn’t even try
instead i spent my hours
searching for easy answers
i chose this life alone and alone it seems i’ll die

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7 Comments

  1. This is a beautiful poem. I love the meter you’ve used. But it’s so sad, Sun.
    In the line “the future had been promised”, I think maybe you meant “turned”? 🙂
    This fan just wants to say that the poet is not alone and has many friends who enjoy his work and appreciate him as a person… 🙂
    Have a good day, Monsieur le Dragon. I’ll be running about today hither and thither…

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    • Thank you, and yes, I did mean “turned”, so thanks for that. 😀

      I was aware, when writing the last line, that it could be read as reflecting my own condition, but it was written to fit the situation of the protagonist who, I assure you, feels a lot more sorry for himself than I do, at least consciously. 😀

      Have a good weekend yourself 😀

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  2. damommza

     /  December 10, 2011

    This is indeed, a very poignant poem and the format is outstanding. I don’t recall another poem that you wrote in the same format. I have always found your last stanzas are the best but, in this piece, I like the first stanza the best. It is the one where the speaker connects most closely with his inner feelings and comes to the realization that it’s just too late…Very good, my friend.

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    • Thanks, I’m sure I must have used this format before, I fell into it so easily, but I can’t be bothered to go through all my poems to make sure, and it’s always possible I used it before I started saving my poetry 😀

      I’ve just made a minor change to the third verse that I think improves it a bit, but I too like the first 😀

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      • damommza

         /  December 10, 2011

        There are few words sorrier than..”before I started saving my poetry..” 😦 I’m sure there were a few pearls thrown out with those oysters. 😀 😀

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