the race

newer thoughts come creeping in, or so the stories run
but that’s the way it’s meant to be, while we are having fun
I take a step towards you and hold out my left hand
and tell you that together we can make a final stand
you laugh at me and clutch me tight and tell me it’s a date
and I would like to trust you but you’re always running late
so sadly I must let you go and head off on my own
to where the way is open and directions may be known
I had a goal at one point and may yet have one again
to find myself ensconced among the better sort of men
but lord I’ve taken too long and the stories nearly done
and all of us were cheating so the race was never won

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  1. damommza

     /  January 18, 2012

    Bravo!! Love the little twist at the end! I love the rhyming pattern here. Long enough to tell a story and with a very nice flow. πŸ˜€ πŸ˜€

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    • Thank you, although I’m not exactly sure what it means (that is not sure what the poem means, not your comment) πŸ˜†

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      • damommza

         /  January 18, 2012

        I interpreted it as a man and woman, both of whom are cheating on each other, and how they can never really have a relationship because neither one is honest enough (to go the distance, run the race). “Newer thoughts come creeping in” – he’s already thinking of the next woman…”you’re always running late” – she sees him in between other guys..etc.

        Or it’s about chocolate.. one of those two things! πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

        I like the pattern because you can say so much more than in mine, where I tend to write in 6 or 8 syllables which can be very choppy. πŸ˜€

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