shattered

shattered fell and damn the days end
weather worn and scarlet eyed
there upon his way he pondered
beguiling thoughts of suicide

there I met him lost and broken
crazy tales he spun that night
I beheld the worlds he painted
I beheld his soul take flight

none of these that now surround me
have a measure of his wit
I would dance to Hell’s own piping
just for one more taste of it

cordons made to hold off grieving
barriers of loss and pain
there upon a road untaken
I would talk to him again

years have gone and with them laughter
crises mark my path ahead
softly I will greet the morning
nightly I will greet the dead

despair the sin and loathe the sinner
specially if it’s you that sins
deal yourself or use a dealer
either way the table wins

so raise your flags salute your masters
what is life if not a game
you may march ‘neath martial banners
I refuse do the same

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  1. damommza

     /  April 16, 2012

    I didn’t think I was going to like this poem but the more I read it, the more I liked it. It’s actually very moving. It’s one of your longest and this time, you didn’t go to the point of “too many words”. “Bravo” on this one. πŸ˜€

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    • Thanks, I think I could make a reasonable case for dropping either, or both, of the last two verses, but this was one of those poems that flowed about as fast as I can type, and it’s rare enough that that happens, so I tend not to like to do much more than a little light editing πŸ˜† in those circumstances πŸ˜€

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      • damommza

         /  April 17, 2012

        I like the last two verses because they are what explain the position that the speaker takes. The next to last stanza gives you an idea of which side the speaker believes he is on and the last verse is what beliefs puts him on that side.

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        • The last two verses serve to expand the the landscape. The argument I could make would be that, though I like them, the landscape does not necessarily need to be expanded, it could have remained with the personal. πŸ˜€

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          • damommza

             /  April 17, 2012

            “expand the landscape*..If I was awake when I wrote my first comment, I might have said that! πŸ˜€ πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

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