reaching ver 2.0

sunovawot & damommza

The interspersed lines were added by damommza to my original poem

gathered all around I reach out
and touch the corners of my tomb
cautiously to feel
is there still any room?
is it day or night time
I really have no clue
and is any of this real
wait, I think that I feel you..
I can hack a Monday morning
buried under all this hate
if the edges aren’t too sharp
and there’s nothing on my plate
I can stand to hear you playing
at least there is some sound
love songs on your harp
even though your mouth is bound
but life is brief and butterflies
which we will never see
may dance around my head
as your body covers me..
and all the words I had for you
I’ve carved in to your heart
have already been said
and I’ve said it from the start..
and honestly I cannot see
that death encircles us..
around each curve or bend
it’s pointless to make a fuss..
so I guess I’ll never know
which one of us dies worst..
when I have reached The End
I hope that you died first..

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  1. damommza

     /  May 28, 2012

    I’m not actually sure how this happened. I read your lines and at the end of each line, my line appeared (in my head) and it just continued that way until The End πŸ˜€

    My typo error: change “die” to “died” on last line! πŸ˜€ The poem can be read side by side as two different complete ones or all together as one.

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    • It doesn’t really matter how it happened, except in the realm of academic interest. If it works don’t take it to pieces to find out why πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜€

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  2. catmadinwestyorkshire

     /  June 13, 2012

    You guys are good! I’ve bin missin reading yur poemz…

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    • damommza

       /  June 13, 2012

      OHAI! CMiWY!!! How yoo been? Now that there are no collectibles on the LOL, I don’t go there as often! Than you for the lovely compliment! We run in waves..sometimes we both need to re-charge before the next slew of poems! This one just came to me as I read his and it became two poems that can be read seperately or as one. We miss you too! πŸ˜€

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    • Thanks, a very interesting collaboration this, in that I did no collaborating, all the heavy lifting was done by damommza πŸ˜†

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