Julie

Julie bought a rowing boat, took us out on the lake
brought the whole crew along which I thought a mistake
and sadly I was right because we’d hardly left the bank
when Johnny-boy mutineed and made us walk the plank

days and nights I’ve spent alone whispering to ghosts
every blessèd one of them full of bull and boasts
many are the stories that I have heard them tell
of how to escape heaven and tunnel into hell

Julie wrote a song for us that nobody could sing
of death and taxes, butterflies, and birdies on the wing
of how the world keeps turning, and why, and what was said
and how to be remembered long after you are dead

and Julie in the morning should I awake once more
don’t play with my emotions as you have done before
instead, and for the first time, let’s try a brand new twist
just go back to your family, pretend I don’t exist

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6 Comments

  1. damommza

     /  October 10, 2012

    This poem is awesome. When I first read it, I thought that you could eliminate the 2nd paragraph but then, on re-reading, it actually fits very well. I love it just the way it is! I give it elebenty clappity-claps! 😀 😀

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    • Thank you 😀 As I’ve said before I don’t like altering poems after I have posted them, but almost as soon as it had posted this it struck me that the last line should read:
      “go back to your real life, pretend I don’t exist” 😀

      Reply
  2. Adaein3

     /  October 11, 2012

    Hi sunovawot! Great poem – how about “go back into your real life, pretend I don’t exist” (just for one more silleebull) Tell me if i am annoying you, you know i admire all you write and share. Thank you,and this one shore is entertaining.

    Reply
    • Thank you :-D, and no, I have no problem with other people’s thoughts. The syllable count doesn’t matter too much, but dropping the initial “just” would keep it to the same count. I do like your idea though, the implication being that what the protagonist and her had was outside normal reality, like Alice’s Wonderland. But I think with that change I would alter the “go” to “step” so the last line would read:
      “step back into your real life, pretend I don’t exist” 😀

      Reply

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