once upon

once upon a passing day
my eyes were green the sky was grey
though I was dancing anyway
or so the stories tell
and where were you as this went down
eyes fixed on the stony ground
come from where and wither bound
under what witches spell
and nothing then as it is now
not fatted calf nor sacred cow
nor reasons given anyhow
why should we embrace change
but time itself will not stand still
by word of law or act of will
and someone yet must stand the bill
though it be passing strange
and promises from days of yore
could be so much and nothing more
than wine spilled out upon the floor
a wasteful wanton deed
so here we stand in heaven’s sight
cast beneath this louring light
one final step into the night
and in the darkness bleed

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  1. Great story telling, Sun !!
    * and another new word for PB, “louring” πŸ˜€ *

    • Thank you πŸ˜€ With this I was conciously using anachronistic language to set a mood, rather than, as I normally do, just chucking it in because it fits and/or rhymes πŸ˜€

  2. damommza

     /  January 25, 2013

    Oh, this was simply awesome! Very moody, kinda scary, got me all tingly.. A definite “dark and stormy” fairy tale!! Kudos on this one!

  3. icanhasanimlols

     /  January 25, 2013

    I loved the cadence and fantasy voice in this one sunovawot. And like PB, I learned a new word but when I went to look it up, it was a smack-my-forehead moment. I have loved and read enough fantasy fiction so I shoulda knowed.

    • Thank you πŸ˜€ When I reread it the cadence leaps out at me, but having written it that’s not surprising, I didn’t know if a reader would get that though. I am, as you may imagine, a great fan of fantasy too, both the traditional sword and sorcery and the more modern urban fantasy πŸ˜€


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