i have come to the conclusion that my life is an illusion
and i have only ever seen a fragment of the real
but there’s no point complaing ’cause nobody’s explaining
what to do, or where, or why, or just how i should feel
and nothing’s been decided nor any truths confided
so all i do is roll along in patterns i can’t see
and if that thought gives you trouble, you can bet it gives me double
but that’s what i am stuck with ’til the day i can break free

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  1. That’s a keeper sunovawot. Like the beat,too. Nicely done

    • Thank you πŸ˜€ Once the first line came to me it provided me with both the subject and the structure πŸ˜€

  2. damommza

     /  March 23, 2014

    I agree with adaein3..the beat is excellent and pulls you right in..the poem is good and the ending, as always, remarkable..kudos for the next to the last line…. πŸ˜€

    • Thank you πŸ˜€ I think that is the first time I’ve used a trouble/double rhyme, though have discovered how useful it is, it will probably pop up in all my poems from now on πŸ˜†

  3. Wooo Hooo !! ** Gives Sun a gold stamp πŸ˜€ **


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